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Read the selection and choose the best answer to each question. Emma wrote this story about a girl and her new coworker. Read Emma's story and look for revisions she needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow. Sawyer's New Coworker (1) Sawyer smiled as she surveyed her surroundings (2) She loved her new job and thought it was fun (3) Wheeling a flat cart of canned goods through Aisle 6, she was enjoying the quiet environment and the complete solitude (4) She was poised to place a can of tomato sauce on its designated shelf when a raucous voice from behind startled her. (5) This caused her to shriek and toss the can over her shoulder. (6) The can dented as it hit the floor, a tiny stream of tomato juice escaping from its side. (7) The echo from an annoyingly loud laugh ricocheted through the aisle and Sawyer quickly spun around, immediately recognizing a classmate of her older brother's. (8) "Hey, sorry if I scared you;" he said with a grin. (9) "My name is Carlos, and my uncle's the manager of the store.(10) He figured I could use a job." (11)Leaning in toward Sawyer, he then whispered that he'd applied for the lifeguard position at the community pool but hadn't gotten it. (12) Sawyer's eyes narrowed (13) She knew enough about Carlos from observing his Do 10. What is the MOST effective way to combine sentences 4 and 5? She was poised to place a can of tomato sauce on its Do can over her shoulder when a raucous voice from behind designated shelf, which caused her to shriek and toss the startled her. She was poised to place a can of tomato sauce on its Do from behind that shrieked and tossed the can over her designated shelf, and she was startled by a raucous voice shoulder. She was poised to place a can of tomato sauce on its
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The most effective way to combine sentences 4 and 5 is:<br /><br />She was poised to place a can of tomato sauce on its designated shelf when a raucous voice from behind startled her.<br /><br />This revision maintains clarity and flow while effectively combining the two sentences.
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